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For Children Fiction Extended Stories (Soap Operas!) sent in by POW! Partners and Students The writing is largely unamended A Collection of Stories from the Yr 4 POW! Group (Sky, Luke, Elliott and Grace) at Parkdale Primary School, Carlton, Notts: Excitement in the Jungle by Grace Good Endings - Tuesday 2nd June 2009 Sky, Luke, Elliott and Grace chose a story called UFO to inspire them to write a good ending, using a mood card with the theme sci-fi. They had great ideas and used some interesting adjectives, adverbs and powerful verbs. What do you think of their shared writing work? All of a sudden the giant sphere got slower and slower till it lost power and dropped heavily in the big golden corn field. Ravi and Alan sneaked up on the silver sphere and saw a door open and smoke come out of it. The smoke formed like a cloud around Ravi and Alan and this terrified them. They noticed three ugly huge aliens with greenish purple skin. One of them was friendly and said, "Hello, how do you do?" Tuesday 22nd June: Amy and Beth, two eleven year old girls were leaving the "High School Concert" at St Cuthbert's Primary School. It was a very dark night because the lamp post lights were not working. They were chatting in a low voice about the concert when suddenly a thief swiped Amy's bag out of her hand. She was worried because her mobile phone, money and house keys were in the bag. Beth shouted, "Help, someone's stolen Amy's bag." Another year six child ran quickly to try and get the bag back which was not a very good idea. The thief ran so fast that he ran into a lamp post and knocked himself out. The child who was following him snatched the bag out of his hand and he ran back to Amy. Amy thanked the child and phoned the police. The police came quickly and arrested the thief. The POW! group were extremely enthusiastic about the idea of writing a shared story using the story plan from the Framegame. They had some great sentence ideas, don't you agree? Tim and Tom hadn't a clue about how the fire started but were very sensible. Do you think mum and dad left them alone again? One gloomy evening at 10 o'clock Tom and Tim were in their house in the bedroom. They were trying to get to sleep but they could hear barking downstairs. Max the dog, sometimes curled up like a cat on the end of Tim's bed but that night the boys had locked him out of the bedroom. Suddenly, the dog started scratching the door and howling. They were cross with Max and told him to be quiet. They opened the door quickly and found smoke rising from downstairs in the living room. Tom and Tim thought about the escape plan mum and dad had told them about. They tied sheets together tightly to make a rope which they tied to the bed leg closest to the window. Tim opened the window and climbed down the rope to safety, then shouted Tom to come down. Their mum and dad had no idea about the fire because they had gone out to play Bingo. The next door neighbour telephoned the Fire Brigade who came really, really quickly, put the fire out and rescued Max. Tom and Tim thought that the dog had died. They were so happy to see him and their parents. A Collection of Stories from the Yr4 POW! Group at Parkdale Primary School, Carlton, Notts. Jo and Sita, The Tribal Chiefs by Arron Good Endings by the Yr4 POW! Group at Parkdale Primary School, Carlton, Notts: Everyone in the POW! group listened to the first part of a short story. Then Arron chose a mood ard which everyone used to tell the end of the story. The theme card was "shocking" and the story title was "Major and Scottie". Major and Scottie Major fell ill and had to go to the vets. The vet was shocked to find that Major had swallowed a huge bone which had got stuck in his stomach. He had to operate on Major to remove it. Major was put to sleep during the operation. When he woke up he was fine. The vet was really shocked that he got up and ran out of the building to his friend Scottie. Scottie was pleased that Major was alive and gave him a big lick. The vet told everyone how shocking it was to find such a big bone. The POW! group chose the story called "Fire!" to read which inspired them to write a happy ending in our shared writing session 10 Tuesday 10th February 2009. What do you think about the ending they chose? Fire! Little Megs was terrified by the smoke and the noise so she hid in the cupboard under the stairs. Megs was feeling scared because she had never heard that noise before. She didn't know that it was the smoke alarm. The cupboard was dark and spooky and it was full of boxes, cobwebs and shoes. Suddenly, she got so scared that she shook, but then Mrs Johnson heard the cat meowing and came and grabbed her, escaping through the window. Mrs Johnson called the fire brigade who put the fire out. Megs was really happy and went to look for her kittens. They were safe and very glad to see her. Arron, Chloe, Hollie and Rowan chose the story ending card "very lucky" and really got involved with the shared writing activity. They used some great vocabulary including alliteration (Monday 2nd March 2009) The Old Tin Chest After a few minutes digging under the dead grass Shamir found a rusty, old tin chest. Shamir was worried that his Grandpa might be angry that he had dug up the grass because he had been told not to. He was shaking with excitement because he thought there might be gold in the rusty chest. Shamir opened it quietly so no one could hear him. Then he opened his eyes wide because he saw gold coins and something wriggling around. Shamir quickly ran into the house for a torch and then top-toed back to the garden shining his torch, so that he could see where he was going. When he got back to the chest he saw a slithery snake trying to get out of the rusty tin Shamir was very frightened and he almost fainted. The snake lifted his neck up as if he was going to bite him and he dodged out of the way slamming the lid shut. Shamir left the chest on the lawn and thought he had had a lucky escape. Grandpa came out to see what was hapening because he had seen the torch light and he wondered who was outside. He saw that Shamir was hiding behind the tree. Shamir was pleased to see Grandpa and he confessed that he had dug up the grass and opened the chest to find the slithery snake. Grandpa was a bit cross and agreed that Shamir had a lucky escape! Chloe, Rowan and Hollie chose the theme card "scary" for the ending to the story called "The Invitation". They used the Door Sentence Opener cards to select more interesting beginnings (9th March 2009) The Invitation The three friends talked to each other about what could be behind the door that they thought was locked. One of the teenagers tried the rusty door handle and it opened with a squeak. The door handle fell off and made a very noisy bang on the broken floor boards. They all jumped back outside into a muddy puddle. Meanwhile Mina saw a shadow going very slowly across the door and it made her tremble. The door opened by itself and they tip-toed inside because they heard a child laughing. They saw a child in the kitchen laughing but when they went over to it they saw it was a doll. On the doll's back was a button and they pressed it and the doll stopped laughing. Dave was wondering who turned the button on because no one else was in the house. They were all petrified and ran as fast as they could outside and Dave looked up and saw a sign warning "Haunted House Do Not Enter!" Everyone learned a lesson, not to go into strange houses.
The Strange Night by Rachael Good Endings (by Ms Robinson's Group, Y5 at Abbey Gates Primary School, Ravenshead, Notts):
"Liar, Liar" examples from Miss Bowers' POW! groups, Carsic Primary School, Sutton-in-Ashfield):
Good Endings (by Miss Murray's Group, Y6 at Carsic Primary School, Sutton-in-Ashfield):
POW! students from Abbey Gates Primary School, Ravenshead, Notts
The Haunted House by Mark, Yr5 POW! Group, New Whittington Primary School Army Camp by Ben, Yr5, Staveley Junior School Country Move by Megan, Yr5, Staveley Junior School
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